The Garden Party
The Characterisation on Mrs Sheridan

Deeper features:
Achievement criteria assessing
- ideas
- crafting
- structure

Directly responds to the question
First idea introduced
Second idea introduced

Body paragraph statement 1

Ideas developed and supported convincingly
Idea links back to the statement

Body paragraph statement 2
Ideas developed and supported convincingly
Idea links back to the statement
Insightful comment

Conclusion:
restates the main ideas presented in introduction in different words.

	Describe an important character in a text you have studied and say how we learn about that character.

In Katherine Mansfield's short story 'The Garden Party' Mrs Sheridan is an important character. Two main techniques used by the author to portray her characteristics are dialogue to depict her middle class background and the event of a worker's death to show us her lack of empathy for others.

One way in which Katherine Mansfield helps us to see Mrs Sheridan as a well educated member of the middle class is by dialogue. Mrs Sheridan's speech is grammatically accurate and the construction of some of her utterances is quite complex. As well, her language tends to be more formal rather than conversational, as in this example: "I was passing the shop yesterday, and I saw them in the window. And I suddenly thought for once in my life I shall have enough canna lilies. The garden party will be a good excuse." This opportunity to indulgence herself by buying the canna lilies indicates her position of wealth. This opportunity to indulgence by buying the canna lilies indicates her position of wealth and suggests to the reader she is a member of middle class society. She appears to accept this as normal rather than a privilege.

The author uses the event of the death of a worker to show us that Mrs Sheridan is not very compassionate towards those of a lower social class. On the day of the garden party a working class neighbour, Mr Scott, is killed in an accident. When Mrs Sheridan hears of the incident, she is only anxious that the man had not been killed in her garden. There was no thought of cancelling the party. In fact, she did not even ask his name. This incident shows us that Mrs Sheridan is very self centred as her only concern relating to the worker's death is how it may affect her. There is no sign of sympathy for the dead man's family or how his family may feel at this time of mourning, in light of the forthcoming party. She obviously regards those of a different social class as inferior to herself.

Through the use of dialogue Mrs Sheridan is portrayed as a member of the middle class. As well Katherine Mansfield description of the death of a member of the lower class allows us to see Mrs Sheridan's lack of compassion for others and depicts the disparity between the social classes.	Surface features:
achievement criteria assessing
-	Conventions

Pronoun referencing

Cohesive device

Exemplification

A range of sentence structures used e.g. simple, compound and complex
Ideas fully developed to give an insight to the character

Writing conventions are used accurately throughout:
Correct syntax (sentence structure), paragraphing, punctuation, and spelling
(NB: a few random errors, or minor editing lapses, are acceptable.	

Note only two main body paragraphs are presented in this sample BUT you need three main body paragraphs that is a total of five paragraphs for the summative task.

The third paragraph has been omitted to avoid "getting too close" to the summative task.