Student 1:
"The only thing that Michael could hear was the zoom off the cars accelerating, and a few honks and beeps. He could also smell a faint tinge of smoke in the air but after that, nothing seemed out of the ordinary."
Student 2:
That was really good. So you're thinking... you think you need a change in there, and how do you know you need to change it?
Student 1:
I think I should add a little bit more of Michael's thoughts so people could know what his character and traits are. I know that I need to add more characterisation in this because in my last lesson that I had, my teacher said that adding characterisation makes the story better.
I feel that characterisation adds more thoughts and feelings and emotion into the character, which helps the story, which helps readers to find the story more interesting.
Student 3:
Well the way I evaluated mine was, I just used the checklist that the teacher gave us, and just went through my story and made sure it kind of went with all the ...
Student 2:
The little different things in the story, so they all matched up. Yeah, that works. Like I suppose if you get a story, sometimes you feel like there isn't... you're missing something. And you can look on there, you can just see if you've got it all or not. It's like a guideline. Yeah.
Student 1:
I think that the peer evaluation is really helpful for me because it allows my people.. my readers who read my story, give me feedback on what I could change or add.
Student 2:
You've got these two bits for this creative writing checklist. You've got a self-evaluation. So you're looking at the story and you're checking up on the different bits in your sort of own personal view. Say, have you used emotions in your story and stuff? So it's stuff you can sort of control. Then you've got the other bits, the peer evaluation. And it's... so you're getting another person's opinion and it's similar type of questions, but they've got a different type of edge to them. So you're getting another person's ideas and thoughts into your story.
So I can tell this stuff's at... it's got the level five work of the, sort of, English writing curriculum in it. You've got different things sort of covering a lot of the things that you need to have in a really good piece of writing. Like it's got, yeah, the character has emotions in the story, and it's got a beginning, a middle, and an end. So this type of stuff is working towards.. working at level five for the writing curriculum.
Student 4:
Being in a group helped me learn much better because, you know, other people's opinions and you can actually know what other people think about your writing, which means you can make your story much better and much more appealing to other people.
Student 5:
I like having a lot of choice in my work because I'm always doing something, I'm not just like stopping and not doing anything. And my friends are motivating me on, and I'm using the most of my time and learning a lot.
